Snow white-Nylissa Vanmanem
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4 responses to “Snow white-Nylissa Vanmanem”
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Great story telling, your use of descriptive language allowed me to feel for the story significantly.
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Good job trying to tell us this story and talk to us rather than just reading the story. You fell a bit into the trap of telling us “about” the story at the start. This can sometimes work if you are incorporating a narrative into a larger speech, which you are doing here to some degree by framing the story by talking about its message at the beginning and end. It does, however, make it harder to bring more of yourself into the storytelling and by extension help your listeners have even more emotional response to the story. Consider how you might use a story in a future speech to bring out a listener’s emotion further. Where can you make use of pauses and changes of tone to help with this as well? Very nice job with the ending of your speech.
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Hi, I agree with Professor Biggie that you fell into the trap of telling us about the story. Nonetheless, we are all beginners and you did a fine job.
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really enjoyed this, you did so well!
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